Monday, 21 January 2008

Irene's essay!

In one hand i think it is not necessary to punish studens if they don’t assist to class, because those are not on obligation.
We want or need to have this studies to acces to other studies we want to do for reach a better job.
We need to pass the exams to graduate, so maybe we only have to so when we have to do an exam not go everyday at school if we don’t want or don’t need help of a teacher.
But in the other hand a work in a public place, there are rules and we must respect then. So its normal that he school have rules too, and if we want to acces to studies we have to accept and respect the rules there are.
Eventually, I prefer to go to class every day, and then it will be easier to study.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

Irene also has reason, because the students are free to represent or not to the classes. Because of it that every student does what wants.

Kisses and good weekend.

Anonymous said...

Hi Irene!
For me your composition is correct.
About you said in the second paragraph, I think that teachers always be necessary because in a book you never will learn the same that from teachers. It's harder learning always with books although they are very good written.
If the public education haven't to exist because the students don't want to go to class because isn't an oblication. I think that it would be very sad.

Anonymous said...

Irene, your text is the correct size!
I guess that you will have noticed that there is no introducion...
Remember that the connector is ON THE ONE HAND / ON THE OTHER HAND, and that "assist" is a false friend in English!
Some of your sentences are difficult to understand... I suggest you that you write shorter sentences next time. Simple = easy to understand! Look, your second paragraph is just ONE sentence!
Can you reread your third paragraph? You can even transtate it into Catalan, and you'll see that there is something wrong... Però per altra banda un treball en un lloc públic, hi ha normes i hem de respectar llavors. Weird, isn't it??
I'm sure next time will be better! :-)