Friday, 18 January 2008

Alex's text!

Should students be punished for not attendance in school?

In my opinion, is wrong to punish students who didn’t attend in class or they skip it for his own decision, it isn’t compulsory to do, or to assist in class.

The students who study for their decision don’t need to have a punishment.
Besides, there are students who are not brilliant and isn’t good to skip classes for they, and this must be, maybe not punished but yes to notice to the student.

But the student who are studying compulsory school must have a punishment to skip their classes, because is necessary and important for this students to attend in all the elementary classes what they are having.

Althought if the assitance to the schools is a big problem, the teachers and directors will find the causes of this descending motivation of all the students.

The trouble is not in the children, the trouble I think it’s in the education system who don’t know how to do the rights things, and they want a desmotivation in the students.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

Hi alex!!! I really agree with you!!! ESO students have to be punished, if not they would never go to classes.But I think we should have a little bit of freedom to decide if in a specific moment we don't want to attend to class.

Anonymous said...

helo hello¡¡¡ I think that your composition is pretty good. I also agree with you that teachers (not all of them) don't knoe how to teach and some of their clases are un paaal, and yes sometimes peple can get desmotivated and that`s not good.

see you :D
OH, im elisa

Anonymous said...

Alex, you wrote a long text! :-)
Be carful, because you forgot the subject in the first sentence!
Assist = help... are you sure you meant that?
for + object pronoun, not subject pronoun
4th paragraph... Teachers will find them, or should find them??
Good try, now, please, rewrite it using the 4 paragraphs and the connectors that we mentioned in class! :-) Nice draft anyway...